I can't quite find the right word to describe what I think. At 1st I thought the video was pretentious by trying to be more than what it is, but now I believe its just inconsistent. The story wasn't impossible to gasp since its pretty much F/z but with some switched roles and Shiki playing as a servant. Still if your focus of this video was the story then you kind of blew it with the way you edited. Now although I didn't like any of the Fx they're not necessarily bad, but still did more harm than good because.. Well consider it like you've got a snickers that is totally covered with ketchup.
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I hope you get my point Lol.
PS: I actually preferred this over the original Lol: https://yadi.sk/i/ZqKQDz5XbYiVe
AlchemistEskimo
Posts : 254 Join date : 2013-05-09 Age : 27 Location : Australia
This a noble attempt I guess but unfortunately it seems to fall flat in many regards. To kick it off the base of the story was promising but you went about in a way that totally killed it for me. Shiki's presence should have been a lot more prominent as her being in the war is basically the core of the video. This whole plot of her and saber having strange unexplained rivalry just came off as weak since it wasn't explained at all and when the kiritsugu vs Kirei fight came around Shiki's existence just seemed insignificant. In the end she just felt shoe horned in. Now your choice of a fast paced post hardcore song tarnishes your story telling since everything just came out as a huge barrage of loosely connected plot elements. I think this concept would have benefited from a song with slower moments that woud've give your story some time to breathe. Unfortunately it just comes off as an action focused version of
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Moving onto the editing side of things I first have to mention how overwhelming and inappropriate all the digi fx were. They work with the song pretty well but you bombarded the video them and it detracted from both the story and the core editing. The action feels a bit off as well with odd moments of sync and parts not flowing as well together as they should have. Creating scenes and trying to make everything coherent damaged the action aspect of the video and vice versa. There were a couple of scene changes that worked well such as 00:26 where saber turns around but the majority didn't work out. This is mainly dude to color inconsistencies, different perspectives of scenes and some like 00:23 even having dark outlines around them. Action parts also seem rough at times especially with your masking at 01:26 and 00:55 etc. Also little effects like the grid and black edges just kinda look tacky and stand out even more in a story oriented video. My favorite part was ending as the scenes had oomph and flowed well with no distracting jumps in color.
All in all your idea had promise but it just seems like you wanted it to be way too many things which made the final video a bit of a clusterfuck. You're capable of good action as proven in some parts of this so good luck with your next project! Oh and sweet poster
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Changelling
Posts : 2430 Join date : 2013-01-09 Age : 27 Location : Hamburg
Tom,mah bro.I know how you edit so i wont dwell on the story part too much as the first fucker with the girly voice.I like how you experiment,and overall i like glitch type amvs.In this case however it's kind of too glitchy,or in other words too hardcut glitchness if you know what i mean.The flow gets stuck from the overdosy nature and rate of the fx.I overall like the colour correction that came through via these fxs,at least they had a clear positive impact on my side.
I think you should keep experimenting on this,seems like you enjoy these types of amvs more than the rest and if you truly do then thats what you should be doing no matter what people hint.
kenshiroAMV
Posts : 82 Join date : 2013-05-27 Age : 31 Location : narnia
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