Hi there!
I think this wasn't bad either but I agree with Andrew, it kinda lacked dynamics. To me the video was a bit too plain to enjoy, I don't really know how to explain, it was a little boring, maybe because of the lack of dynamics. I didn't like some of the effects, for example that eye transition was a bit too much for this kind of video in my opinion (at about 1:33), and the coloring at around 1:38 was too much, and by that I mean that it looked like the coloring ruined the quality so if you darken or lighten the scenes then try to do it softly so that it won't ruin the quality, although I think overall the coloring wasn't really needed anyway. Well anyway good luck to your next videos!