O my, what a late reply.
I believe Dance AMVs are 70% about links, and you got that part right to some extent, but there was a general lack of good links that carry the video. (Links are when you follow a clip with a perfect continuation from a different source, or different scene, incase you're wondering).
I also couldn't help but feel annoyed at the scenes of these girls dancing and singing on stage, it looks kinda lame and it stays for so long in the video. Also, the female to male lip sync felt totally wrong so I wished if these parts didn't exist in the video, because it would otherwise have been pretty nice dance video.
I sincerely hope for you to have gained good experience from this Akross attempt, and I'll be looking forward to you dominating from now on! Keep going yo!